I liked the repetitive link between the first and last lines. The whole thing had a great effect and clinched the piece for me. The 'we have rotted away into eternity' was fantastic, because it isn't a coupling of words that one usually find, and it's very impacting. I thought you did a great job with this one.

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I like it. Thought I'm not sure quite what it was... I still think that your imagry was clever