Great poem. Could you check out my stories sometime? I could use some reviews ;)

what a unique form :) i enjoyed it

"meant to caress a boys hair,"...boy's

I really liked the ending. I thought the description of the people after 9/11 was definitely something we all saw. The whole hair thing was interesting. I really liked the format here with the three rules. Though I felt like either a parenthesis or a period would work instead of both.