|Reviews for Carousel|
| this wild abyss 3/18/11 . chapter 1
I liked the extended metaphor you used in this piece because I felt that it fit the emotions and scene to an advantage.
I did think that the poem was unclear at places. "Yet forever will not be together" didn't make a lot of sense given the context, and the vague reference left me confused rather than intrigued.
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