Slightly odd, and I'm not sure it should end there, but I like it. You are truly talanted.

I like where it stops though. It seems right. I'm sure if you ever got to finish it, it would be amazing, but I prefer it like this.

I'm intrigued.

So this was really short, but I like it. At first I thought the speaker was a girl, but then I realized it wasn't. Heh. That was probably just me being stupid, though.

Um...so not much really happens in this, but it's good writing and a good concept. I wish we could see more of Dominic and Jay, though, since there isn't much interaction between them. But overall, pretty good job.

This is strangely beautiful, because is both reads finished and not-finished at the same time. The first time I read it throught, I got to the end and was like what? Thats not an ending. And then I reread it, and realised, that it was, and kind of sweet and innocent one.