AW, someones sentimental.

That unoriginal pitiful excuse for a story shouldn't even be posted. Your writing sucks.

:P

The UnBorn Bastard

good prologue. creative writer

I like the concept, and it's cool that you were able to relay so much in such a short chapter, but I'd love to see more to it. It doesn't quite feel like a complete thought, even for the minimalist approach. It's good, but it would be great if there was more.