this is really good i can't wait to know what happens next!

This should be more than one chapter. I don't mean it in a bad way, this is really good. I love it, but there is more to the story. It's like, I can sense more happening. You should definetly continue it.

I really liked the story line. It had great suspense and I felt like it could've been a real story that was passed down.

There were a few spelling and grammatical errors but other than that it was great!

I hope you do continue it if you're not too busy with your other stories. It's interesting.

wow! That was amazingly AWESOME! So dark and creepy and well written with a hint of romance! My favorite mix! Yea, this could do with just this, but if you wanna write more then go ahead! :D

Wow this gave me the heeby jeebies! Not only just cause it was horrid but ah my gosh when I was younger I use to have nightmare of being eaten by lions, so yeah this was scary! Lol but well written your a great writer! :)