Again, the level of skill you show at your age blows me away. One thing, though: at certain points the commas somehow ruin the flow and rhythm to which the poem reads. 'I stood, amidst all the people' should flow at 'stood amidst' but divides itself, and 'I felt, Eyes of the beautiful, I saw' somehow flows too much and needs a sense of disjointed-ness, like: 'I felt eyes of. The beautiful. I saw you staring at me.'

That, for me, makes more sense. I do, however, read and articulate differently from you, so don't take what I say too seriously.

i love this !

5/5!

sweet and sad like this manga i read...it ended sadly T-T but its awesome keep it up

I absolutely adore this! The first stanza is brilliant because it emphasizes the first part of each sentence. Great job!

Great poem! I loved the first stanza - really brilliant introduction to the rest of the piece :) Occasionally the rhymes seemed a little clumsy, and you might want to double-check the punctuation, but the language was really good :)