Interesting, potential. His name is Chris, which makes me think maybe the title has two meanings in the plot. But I'm known to overanalyze. :)

A church girl story. I like. I like.

I think you should add more detail to water ballon fight though. It could be a really fun piece.

Chris's reluctance to come is interesting. A lot of people are like that regarding churchy activites, and you captured that.

:)

-LN

please keep up with this story.. I really think it has a lot of potential and we need more christian based romances on fp. I like the way that you write and it flows really well and keeps the reader interested. Good job