I liked the sweeter tone of this chapter because it felt perfect after the darker themes of previous chapters. I did think that your wordchoice could have been better because your imagery was cliched here.

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I liked your use of imagery while speaking of the scrapbook made out of dreams because it was an interesting and fairly accurate take on real-life situations. In the very last line with the parentheses, you had a typo that distracted me from the rest of the peice, so you might want to go and fix that up. (It should be you're, not your)

I liked the stutter in the last line because it was unique and added to the narrator's unique voice and tone. I didn't really like the italics in the second to last line because they seemed superfluous and I didn't really understand the point you were trying to make.

I liked you wordchoice in this poem because it was evocative and really added to the imagery of the piece. I also like how you don't use punctuation, because it really gives room for the piece to speak for itself.

I liked the techniques you applied in this piece because they were different and really made an impact on me as a reader. I wasn't so fond of the disconnection between the two parts because I couldn't see how they related to one another and they seemed like they should have been put into separate chapters by themselves.

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