first of all i really love your penname, but in this story i really really love this one line,

"Life is disappointing to the freedom-seeker."

i have never seen such a glorious mix of metaphors before. "football bruises" and "rhinoceros skin", oh my gosh i never knew these phrases could make me so happy.

i love this. it's just so... painful.

Awesome word combo: 'disney dreams'