|Reviews for Komae Grade School|
| Baseball Rockz 4/1/11 . chapter 7
Bodyguard, nice one
| Baseball Rockz 4/1/11 . chapter 6
Yea, nice cliffhanger, -_-!
| Baseball Rockz 4/1/11 . chapter 5
Yea, you should make the next chapters longer
| Baseball Rockz 4/1/11 . chapter 4
Haha! Haru's dead, so his Mother is dead, how sad
| Baseball Rockz 4/1/11 . chapter 3
Is his Mother going to die? Hey, I can be your beta reader
| Baseball Rockz 4/1/11 . chapter 2
What a creepy Father he has
| Baseball Rockz 4/1/11 . chapter 1
Great Story, although you could be more descriptive
| Horch 3/29/11 . chapter 6
Of course it's long enough, Nyka.
And WHY on Earth do first graders know about Arthur MacArthur? That's completely illogical. We were only taught about Arthur MacArthur (Along with Generals Elwell Otis and Wesley Merritt)in fifth grade.
With All Due Respect,
The True Mockingjay (Formerly known as TheGreatUnknown.)
| Horch 3/24/11 . chapter 4
I like how you're always talking about rears.
But I hate how you made Haru's mom die. Why did you have to do that? Haru's mom was the only non-abusive person to Haru, and you had to take her out too? Why didn't you take out Haru's dad?
| So 3/24/11 . chapter 3
In this chapter, near the ending, the "breathe" should be "breath". But aside that, great story!
| Horch 3/19/11 . chapter 2
Pebb, the words, the words! I mean, you've certainly improved your spelling since I last read your work, but the idea. It's wrong-how can a seven-year-old know bad words like damn and bastard? That sort of thing just seems wrong. I didn't know words like that when I was seven. -Horch-
| TheSyrupNugget 3/17/11 . chapter 1
Well written, but the speech seems a tad unrealistic coming from a seven year old, particularly one with a strict, abusive father.