|Reviews for All that she ever wanted|
| Ahrlaedrin 3/27/11 . chapter 1
You know, she sort of reminds me of myself sometimes.
At times, I want to cry and sob, and see if someone would care, but in the end, I just hold it back and my throat begins to hurt from it.
It has something to do with the fact that I'm a bit overly paranoid about people. Your poetry is rather inspiring, do you mind if I write one in honour of your poetry? I would love to do that.
PS: Faving this too.
| Iva Hartnet 3/22/11 . chapter 1
'Maybe she would be happier,
had more friends and a gradient smile.'
Grammatically shouldn't it be 'have more friends'? Or if you were to use 'had' then would have been happier would have fit better. Just a thought.
But I really liked it! It was sad and touching. And also well written. I liked the rhythm your poem followed as well :)
| SargentLooneyPencil 3/22/11 . chapter 1
wow.. that was beautiful and so true.. i've felt this way before; great job! write more!