I love the plot line! It's so original and I can't wait for the story to advance.

Very cool start! I like the characters and the dynamics you've set up.

I was fearful when you said this might be a choose your own adventure kind of plot but I am interested none the less. Kind of dark, but I love the title and the mythogoly it brings about. I am a sucker for myths and legends. I really can't feel sorry for Bane because he is a touch crazy in the brain. Love the summary by the way. Summaries are difficult but your summary for Oneiros captures potenial readers well. Good overall. Update soon. -PJ