"The eagle flew away with its pray, never even touching the ground in the process of hunting, gathering and departing.

A scorpion has risen from the sand and attacked a spider that stepped carefully from the shadow of a rock to find its pray. Spider, now becoming the pray itself, looked small and fragile compared to the scorpion. It never stood a chance."

*prey. not pray

I liked your descriptions of power, but to many commas. Other than that it was a pretty good prologue.

You should continue writing. :D

Ugh I can't private message... so I'll just review you again to talk to you.

I read the prolouge and a little of the first chapt but I couldn't find the motivation to keep reading.

I think you're jumping a bit too fast and there's no build up with the story here.

I'm sorry but I don't think I'll read the rest.

I have to say, this is extremely well written, the base plot is well thought out, and all in all it is exremely good. I think I speak for a huge portion of this site, namely the grammar nazi portion, when I say that you NEED to not only spellcheck, but do a read through. in the very first sentence there is an error. While this is an amazing story, errors like these detract from it and dont allow readers to enjoy it for waht it is, an amazing story. Peace,

Riyin Nos Reche