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okay I'm rereading my old poems and
LOL WTF "IF NOT HIS NAME WILL NOT BE PERCY"
oh god why.

am i trying to be funny here
lolwat.

:)

I had to read it twice to understand it more, but then the first time I was half distracted. Now that I do understand it, I found that it has a lot more meaning than I thought, and certainly is a lot more complicated. For me it was almost like a puzzle, I had to fit all the pieces together to understand it. I enjoyed doing that and reading this.

Grah, you get stories/sonnets/whatever in your mind so fast. I am envious! I have many story ideas but I can't be bothered to type them down, you lucky cod! I really should update my horror story, but I can't bring myself too. Even worse I left everyone at a cliffie.

Hehehe... Percy.. XD Also, unbend is the wrong word to use at the end; the best word is unbent, which suits it more.

"In the end, that war ends,

Yet his mindset was left unbent."

I also seem to be finding something wrong with "In the end, that war ends" I just can't seem to think of what.

"As a finale, that war ends,

Yet his mindset was left unbent."

Not every word has to have the same ending words, like with Percy. The Percy though made me lose all seriousness I Had for this sonnet. I just couldn't take it seriously, it just seemed so out of place that I had to give out a quick little giggle once I finished reading it.

But, I don't know, I'm not good at sonnets, this is just my critique for now, despite the fact that it fails.