|Reviews for Bang Bang|
| Lets Get Moderate 5/1/12 . chapter 2
"With a dark smile I push myself out of my chair, wishing nothing more than to take those glassed and crush them under my foot"
One little error, it should be glasses instead of glassed
"e wore a business suit like the rest of us, yet he still seemed to come off intimidating."
Right here it might be good to add a bit of description into the bosses suit. Colors like red and purple usually mean power, so maybe giving him a purple tie would help signify that and give him a bit more substance for the reader to imagine.
Why is Matthews such a jerk to Sampson? I feel like it's for next to no reason that he wants him gone or in trouble. Sampson seems like an ok person, his reasons for wanting to stay in the town or something I wonder about, and I'll look for in the rest of the story.
| Lets Get Moderate 5/1/12 . chapter 1
A lot happens in this chapter, which makes it different than most other stories just because so little was given from beginning to end, information wise.
This story draws a lot on the reader's own curiousity, but I feel like it only would do so for a small number of people.
As the first person we see I thought the girl would survive longer so I felt something when she died that makes me want to read on, I think that's pretty cool how you did that at the very beginning of the story.
| The-Alpis 4/5/11 . chapter 8
woa! scary chapter.
| Lorina Lee Belmont218 3/31/11 . chapter 5
Great story so far!
| dramalover21 3/31/11 . chapter 5
I'm so glad to see that you've returned from your eternally long absence! I'm really liking this story so far! Eve is such a bad ss, and I love Donatello's devil may care attitude. Really looking forward to seeing what the supernatural aspect is in this story. I can't tell yet what the guy in the prologue is that shot Angel. However, since you have written a demon story before, that's going to be my first guess, lol.
Can't wait for the next update!