I love the imagery in this. Any kind of nautical or beach imagery is one of my favorite types to work with, probably because of how mystical it seems. I love "quicksilver seahorses" and the last line especially. The first line doesn't really seem to fit in with the oceanic imagery of the rest of it, but I do love the "birds singing to your shoulder blades" part. Very nice. Keep writing! :)

Wow. That was so vivid. It's amazing!

I see you didn't put this under poetry, are you considering making it into a book?

I'd be curious to see where it goes if you do!

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beautiful and otherworldly