|Reviews for Dark Knights|
| Dexter Corvus 4/4/11 . chapter 1
I enjoyed it. Your description is very good, and the premise sounds interesting... also, I don't know what the previous reviewer was talking about... the whole spacing thing is automatically done by Fictionpress... again, good so far, I'm interested to see where it goes.
| Angel Investor 4/4/11 . chapter 1
Your writing style and grammar are pretty good. However, the non-existense of paragraphs bothers me. You do realize you don't have to click enter after every sentence? Only lines of dialogue automatically start a new paragraph.
Another thing to work on is description. Yours is pretty good, but there is too little of it, especially for a first chapter that is supposed to introduce your readers to the characters and the setting. So far you're relying too much on the dialogue.
Those points aside, I think you have potential for a good author if you work to fix your mistakes. Keep going.