Congrats, love.

I really enjoyed your writing style. I loved the mood, very tactile writing which gave me a good idea of the physical sensations the main character felt. You paired this with a neat abruptness which kept the pace quick and engaging. I'd like to see more stuff from you. My advice would be to give more emotion/personality to characters in the future. It's hard to judge because your main character is understandably disconnected, but at the same time, as the reader, she seemed very unreachable which took away from some of my investment in your work.

Thanks for sharing!

Beelz

Wow...just wow.

-Chloe

Slightly confusing, very creepy, totally worth it. Two thumbs up!

Excellent job, O authoress of the dark... *dark chuckle*

-Omega