wow, that's some drama now.
Hunter actually seems like a decent guy. Only, dumping Jessica that way was a bad move - I wonder what his explanation will be. He has to have an explanation, it wouldn't fit with his character if he really was so shallow. I mean, this guy even reads, doesn't he? :D

Anyway, Aiden's cute too. Too bad Sophia doesn't see him that way. But, well, she doesn't. They even kissed - and maybe Aiden isn't really crushing at her either since he never made another move after the kiss?

I'm not sure about this Hunter right now.
I don't like that he smokes and drinks and even smokes weed. And even worse is that he encourages her to smoke and drink too. Maybe he even deals with drugs and that's why the other guys don't like him.
On the other hand he seems to really care for Sophia and sometimes he really behaves decently. I'm so not sure about him - but there isn't really any competition for him, is there? Aiden seems to have a big crush for Soph, but she clearly doesn't see him as anything else but a friend. She never looks at his body or thinks about his eyes or anything - so maybe he doesn't look that hot. Same goes for Dave.
So maybe Hunter will develop? Maybe he will give up the drugs and end up finding a goal for himself in life, maybe he will decide he wants further eduction or at least he wants to train as a cameraman at this production company or something like this? Except if his job is at a porn production... *giggle* - I don't know what to think right now. But there's still ,like 5 chapters left, so I'm curious what will happen in the next chapter. Will Sophia really have sex with him? Or will she chicken out in time? Which would be a good thing, I think, considering she's having second thoughts about it all the time and still isn't sure about Hunter. I think Hunter need to show his true colours first - and of course they have to be good ones. ;) So how will he react when she tells him she's not ready?

Can't wait for Sophia to talk to Hunter!

Great chapter and great writing! Please update soon!

Please update soon! Cliffhangers annoy me even though I do enjoy reading them, which is kind of awkward now that I think about it.

When are you going to update?

I dont really know what to say other than I LOVE THIS story so much so please update it as soon as you get a chance! :)

Update soon!

I hope she stays with Hunter... Aiden is pretty annoying...

Sorry this took me such a long time to return. I’ve been incredibly busy recently. Anyway, I think you portray the reaction of a family to loss incredibly well. The balance of emotion and angst and tenderness was really well done. I’m glad that you have Toby in there as sort of a respite from the tragedy. I wish you could have given a bit more description of how the mom looked. I was a little confused whether she died from of physical a combination and emotional trauma, or whether she committed suicide.

I did get the sense she knew her end was coming near, since she told them to take care of each other, so that was good foreshadowing there.

[Like that we stayed for God knows how long, now orphans.] I thought this line was really powerful.

I loved it!

This was emotional.

I read this with tears in my eyes, actually. It reminds me of two funerals I had to go to this year, each within the space of a month. My Grandads.

You wrote this so well. So, so well.

Well done :).

Wow...
at first, when I started to read this I was a bit...hmmm. Is this going to be like a normal YA story? The answer to my question now I've read more is of course, no!

Wow, Sophia is such a strong character. I like how she told Hunter no instead of letting him take her virginity in a less than amazing circumstance (I've read so many stories where the girls are all like...zomg take me now even though you're like totally only just using me.) I'm sure you know what I mean :P. I also like how she has dealt with her parents' death so far, and her relationship with Mattie. The only thing I don't like about her is that she likes Gerard Way...haha. That's just a personal thing, and actually I don't really mind it at all. It's a better choice than fawning over Hayley Williams ;)

Mattie seems nice, I can't help but feel that he's hiding something though...maybe that's just me. I don't know.

I really like Cassie too. I feel sorry for her though. I'm not sure why, I'm sure it'll become clear soon.

Another thing I really love is your writing style. You take time to explain things, not have her focus on Hunter which is good. He hasn't appeared for a couple of chapters which is also good because you're not rushing it. I have read too many stories, and actually written too many stories where things get rushed and then the plot falls apart.

I could go on forever praising this, I really could. You've kept me in such suspense all the way through, and Sophia's parents death actually made me sit here in my chair and say..oh my gosh. And I felt sorry for her. It's a good sign that I feel connected to your characters because that's a really hard thing for me to do!

Wow, again. Seriously. I can't wait to read more!

Hey. So I liked how you dealt with Sophia and Mattie the morning after (?) the hospital trip. Sophia's reaction to her father's death, the way she tries to distract herself through reading the Cosmo magazine and her ultimate inability to do so really showed the complexity of her emotions I thought. I'm glad that she has good friends like Aiden to fall back on. I thought her remark about how he sounds strangely eager to help her was a good indication as to how everyone's treading lightly around Sophia in lieu of the accident, which I know is both sweet and annoying.

I also thought Cassie was a sweetheart in this chapter. I thought it was a cool detail how Sophia contrasted her mom's pictures of musicians and actors in their home to Cassie's family portraits in her house. It seems to me that Sophia's parents led a pretty hip life, though Cassie's possibly more family oriented.

Great chapter!
Merle

Whoa spicy... LOL
great job. Aiden all the way! :)