| Reviews for Forgotten Promises |
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yourstruly901 1/10/13 . chapter 4 Love the new chapter! But seriously, NOTHING HAPPENED! Grrrr... Well just keep on doing what you do so I don't get too mad! :P |
contrary 1/3/13 . chapter 4 Really good, again... The fainting bit has been improved, so thanks for that. Just one thing; you make it seem like its some big thing- 'just before i had to turn around to order' wow he had to turn around to order! What an amazing thing... You might want to change that a bit. |
contrary 12/21/12 . chapter 3 Good, but i didnt like the fainting. 1) its not in her character 2) it makes her seem weak and girly, as opposed to her being boyish by not wearing tight clothing, as above, this contrasts with our mental build up of the character 3) come on, she cant be THAT much of a drama queen So remove the fainting! Just do, 'i gasped in shock as memores flooded my mind' or sumthing. Then this chapter will b amazing (btw |
SwagOnNiall 12/22/12 . chapter 3Awww hahaha Rose's friends are so funny :D Ohh btw I'm from Canada as well and Tim Horton's is the best D: Please update the next chapter fast. Can't wait |
SwagOnNiall 12/22/12 . chapter 2Awww I felt so sorry for Rosemary :'( Who is the new dude I wonder? Does he have anything to do with AJ? |
SwagOnNiall 12/22/12 . chapter 1Awww what a cute beginning :) I love all of your characters already. Hope the next chapter is when they meet again :D |
yourstruly901 12/22/12 . chapter 3I LOVE your story! Please update soon! It has a really good plot so far! P.S. Toronto? Cool! |
Guest 12/15/12 . chapter 2 aww poor Rosemary! |
The Phoenix Girl 12/15/12 . chapter 3What? NO! you can't end the chapter here! pleeaaase update soon! I NEED to know what will happen next! great updates! keep up the good work :) |
terrace 12/12/12 . chapter 3 Is it him? Is it him? I bet its him. Its him. |
Guest 12/5/12 . chapter 2 Omg I'm in love with this! |
myheart4you 11/14/12 . chapter 1Okay, this is adorable. Yes, you should continue. I have a few corrections that can make it even better though! You didn't add enough commas. When you are writing, read a sentence. If it sounds like it has a pause, add a comma. (Like I've been doing in this review. Pay attention to where I put commas) Make sure you add question marks when there is a question. Stay in one tense. It's easy to do, but you kept switching from past to present tense, even in one sentence. Other than that, this was adorable and I really want to know what happens next. |
The Phoenix Girl 4/30/12 . chapter 1This story is so sweet and A.J and Rose's friendship is so cute :) too bad he had to leave :( |
InLoveWithSongs 10/26/11 . chapter 1I lIkEd the introduction :DIn the next chapter is that when they meet again or is it one showing how he broke his promise(just guessing)?I can't wait to see what it's like and how they both handle meeting again :D |
ilovechickensandcows 8/18/11 . chapter 2good beginning though i feel like somethings missing, don't know what though :P... i'm really curious how this story will turn out. please update!] |