That's a great ending. Just killing them both like that...it's GREAT! Haha, and also, I enjoyed the "lightning and reverse umbrella" concept. Very cool. The "pointless life" thing is very understandable, and I'm glad my character survived this far! Also, in my new story, I used something of yours. I hope you don't mind...

Ray, you bastard.

I truly believe you should publish your writings. Not mine, per se, but your own stories, because what you've done for me here is amazing. My story has gotten more than I could ever ask for, and I thank you for the amazing, thrilling tale. You've gone past my expectations, and for that, I salute you. This was GREAT! The Final Line was the best. "The Noose Tightened." So simple, yet so elegant. I wish so badly that others could see your greatness...

NOOOOOOO! RAAAAAAY!

...Wow. Is it...over? That was amazing. The way you put your words in the last chapter was superb. Thank you for bringing a new life to my story. Thank you.

Not what I was expecting at all, but still freaking amazing! I love it! I was sad for a minute until I realized Ray wasn't dead...YES! Can't wait for the next one...

That was amazing...is it over? The writing was incredible, and I had no idea what was to become of the character I had created...Great!

Wire like material evolution? Almost sounds like that liquid robot from Terminator. That must be some evolution...you never cease to amaze me with writing, Pandemyx.

"They both laughed heartily?" Ray and Zach are sick! Haha, but anyways, I'd like to see "Omega and The Queen" develop some more. Please continue.

"They both laughed heartily?" Ray and Zach are sick! Haha, but anyways, I'd like to see "Omega and The Queen" develop some more. Please continue.

Good. Very good...I'm glad I picked you for this. Very original, and I love the dialogue. It feels so strange being a co-author now, but I love what you've done so far. Thanks!