That was a good story. :) I dont see why you shortened it, I wanted it to continue. The same with your other historical/romance story Kidnapped. You are a very good writer. I hope your other stories are this good, but a little longer. :D

YES CONTINUE! i like rome... and the roman soldiers. they are always so funny in stories :D

And i like the ending... it has potential ;)

This is awesome. If you still have the full version, can you post it. This would be great to continue on with when you finish your other stories. Well written. I think this would be something that would be easily published and sold in a bookstore. If you ever did continue on with it, think about publishing it. This clearly showcases your talent this story.

There was only one or two spelling/grammar mistakes but apart from that, pure brilliance.

a realy good short story

Hi. It's so beautiful story and I love it. :) I am wonder if there will be romantic between Petros and Marli? *curiously* I am wonder when is this story set into? *curiously* I am wonder why is there civic war between celtic and roman? *curiously* I am wonder how old are Aladic, Petros, Calium, Marli, Lindon and Isaac? *curiously* I am glad that Petros found Marli and will heal up her sis's heal with Aladic's help. Yay! :D I am wonder why Petros won't let Marli and her sister to go home? *curiously* I am glad that Petros take care of Marli and Lindon under his roof. Yay! :D I am glad that the romans won the war. :D It'll be more interesting if this story turn out bit longer or into a book. :D Is this story the part for your major project? *curiously* The war should add bit more blood and actions. :D I am glad that Aladin, Petros and Calium are gentlemen than Isaac. :) Its true, in the war world where most women were raped or sold for slave or sleep with a enemy to get a medicine for children or a friend who fall sick. Its sad way of the life that time. :( I am hoping there will be more of Petros and Marli one shot stories in the future. :D I can see that you love history so much and it'll be nice if you became history teacher one day. :D I am wonder are you plan to write a story about greek god/goddesses one shot or just a book later into the future? *curiously* It'll be interesting to read it. :D There is a series of novels for teenagers that is based on greek god and goddess world and modern world. Its so cute, adornable and interesting story. :D The problem is that I can't remember it the authour of that story that annoy me whenever I go into local library. :( It always struck in my head when I knew the good story and I can't remember the authors who wrote it. :( It's amazing story and I love it. I am enjoy read this story so much. :D Keep writing and don't stop writing. :D The romans mythology are the one of my favourite history beside greek, chinese and other cultures of mythology. :D