I thought it was some crazy snow storm and the wind started some electric fire.
Also, it's me. I wanted to talk to you, but you disabled PM.

Wow,...intentse.
That is the only thing that I can say at the moment.
Onwards, you may have heard of me from KML92, I wanted to check out what you had. So, Hi!
Next, I love that you have no grammar or spelling errors, and the description is off the charts. I normally tend to leave out maybe one or two little details that are small and don't seem like a big deal, which they are. You did REALLY good.
I wish there could have been a little more, but a scene is a scene.

I hope this helps but I don't want you taking this the wrong way.

The first two paragraphs are descriptive but I wish that you had mixed up the beginning of some sentences; I felt like every sentence began with "Anastasia". They didn't but I guess with such a unique name, every use stands out and seems rather overwhelming since there are no other characters to mix it up.

I really liked the second paragraph where you mentioned the snow being "unwanted".

Overall, I think the sensations inside the girl were focused on too much; I'd like to know why she was in the forest to begin with. Also, at one point, she mentions "the waging war that was draining her life away." How did she KNOW it was killing her? Or did she just FEEL like the pain would kill her?

As it stands, this is good, but you can do better-a little tweaking and elaboration would do the trick.

-Tay

Very intriguing beginning and I hope you do continue this. I think there are two paths one could take here. It could be something medical or it could be supernatural. My top two choices: a brain tumor (perhaps in an unusual place) or a transformation (werewolf being the most ideal due to the wolf's howl).

it's kind of... creepy? nah... that's not the word to describe it. i think it's part something to do w/ werewolf and sumn else i can't place my finger on... but i rly like it!

please continue, you're a really good writer ]

Oh my GOD! That was amazing!

Well, unlike the explosion and warewolf stuff, I thought of it as a more emotional way.

(It also seemed like the scene when lava girl dived into the freezing waters and almost dies)

I actually thought back to the movie Anastasia. The fire was her trying to remember her past and the anger inside her that she doesn;t know who her family is.

The cold on the outside was her actual physical circumstance and the fact that she no longer has anywhere to live and she is alone in the winter.

A battle of fire and ice. I loved this anecdote!

Like it. I think that Anastasia's a girl with the power to control fire, and this was her first time using it, so her powers were uncontrollable, and really burning her. Or at least, that's where I would take that scene.