I think you've said a lot with those few words and I like that.

So little words. And yet, it has portrayed the emotion of a person who is hoping for something or someone they cant have.. Great JoB!

Great piece! I love the simplicity and emotion, and how much meaning you pack into so few words.

Quite a strong opening stanza. But you seemed to dwindle midway through the poem as it seemed a bit abrupt. Some more verses would have worked or alternatively, more compelling wording.