I'm in your fridge reading your story :D And might I say that, that cake was already eaten before I got there.

sounds like a kick-ass name for a cat or at least a pokemon... 'Mr. Pimpers I choose you!', 'Mr. Pimpers used pimp slap!' Or doubleslap, you choose.

Anywhat, This story seems oks (Maybe ifs I reads moars I would kind of get addicted)but it needs some help with some grammar (Imma just saying) except for that I'm looking forward for her to become teh new female Jebus/Messiah.

Keep it up and maybe proof read it at times and I know it'll turn out good. (Gee it sure is cold in your fridge too :( Om nom noms on moar chocolatey goodness)