I liked the a/n. I really provided a great context to the piece.

I liked the alliteration in the first stanza. That was a nice touch. I also like how you tied in the first and last stanza with the metaphors. It also tied into the title well.

I also loved the fourth stanza. The last two lines were great. It describes the writing process well I think. The next stanza is great too. Loved the word choices of "natural chorus" and "remnants."

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I loved this.

I liked how it all flowed together - some people may not like a complete lack of punctuation, but it really, really works well here. I love the references you make to music throughout the piece. Very well done :)

"caught in my eyes

can they see what

I hear?" so very interesting.

it reads like the uncontrollable force of water, running down, and is all over the place perfectly. it feels like a gymnast's routine of leg stretches and flexible exercises. you are originality and inate creation