You write very well. Lots of detail with lots of action. You get right to it and that is a special way to write.

Good Luck to you in your writing. Sandy

WOW! OMG! WOW!

uh...

WOW!

yeah...well, I love it! it's awesome! so coooool! :D

I don't get how you could have made me this excited about a story in just two chapters...it's scary how you did that...but that doesn't mean I don't like your other stories! definitely not! I love those too!

but...wow.

sorry. I don't know what to say, I'm so excited!

sigh.

I really do like it. Nothing else much to say. sorry. update soon :)

...sorry I'm at a loss for words...

Of course I'll give you some love! cuz, ya know, i wuv dis story! It really is awesome, and the writing seems totally different from your other story that I've read. Really good detail throughout the whole thing - making it seem twice as long as it really is ( :D ) - nice cliff hanger (great, you're making me wait), and overall it's just...um...awesome (sorry, I don't know any words that also mean awesome, or I just can't think of any at the moment)

I don't know...something about this is making me really excited.

that's cool.

try to update soon!

I am quite impressed that you're 14 years old. This chapter is really well written which kept me interested.

Hope you will continue this story.