|Reviews for How to Catch a Killer|
| babykenzie123 8/6/12 . chapter 10
this Dave guy is really creepy, trapping bree in the rest room. :$ i dont even know how he got in the girls restroom without people giving him wtf looks lol ...speaking of wtf looks -Insert Sean's infamous wtf look here-
well anyway some how i knew she was going to run into dave again... then again she did ask for it as soon as she was in the mall again :p well now that helena knows i wonder if dave going to find out. :0 *gasp* what happens if he does find out (dun dun dun)
well i guess my rambleing time is over :(
but cant wait till next chapter
| Teeiinneell 6/17/12 . chapter 10
Your review replies make me nervous! You answer my question and then give me another gazillion questions I want to ask you! I'm glad you're updating again though, it inspires me to get back to my stuff. Almost. Writer's block kills all.
Eagerly awaiting the next chapter!
| Shadow Kissed Twilight 6/5/12 . chapter 10
Loved the Heartbreaker easter egglet. Joey continues to make me laugh at inappropriate moments. Helena obviously has a plan in mind, being that the character has yet to be evolved, I can't even really guess what that plan is. Continue to adore you work- including the useful Spanish sentences. :)
Be safe- Danny
| Alice in Reality 6/5/12 . chapter 10
I had a feeling she would run into Dave again! Dave must have a (not so secret) love for trapping people in bathrooms. I'm surprised they weren't interrupted by someone. That's a gutsy place to threaten someone, especially since Dave was in the women's restroom. But then again, Helena was in the restroom with them the entire time, so they really weren't alone.
Now I'm not sure what to think about Frank. I guess he really is a different character. I got a little overexcited when I read the last chapter.
As for Helena, I think that was a clever way of adding her into the story. Your summary pretty much tells us that she'll get involved somehow, but I like that she found out accidentally and Aubrey and Brett didn't willingly tell her. Since Aubrey didn't like Helena, I was trying to figure out how she'd find out about Dave. Great job as always! I'm eagerly awaiting the arrival of Art now!
| Alice in Reality 6/5/12 . chapter 9
Brett ran into Adam and Joey! That's great! And it works because they all live in Colorado.
Poor Brett, breaking tables and accidentally stealing swim wear! You're so mean to him! But that's yet another thing that makes your stories so fun to read. :)
I have a feeling Frank isn't as mysterious as you're making him out to be. I think we already know who Frank is. From the plot twists in your other stories, I'm going to guess that Frank is one of the bad guys using a fake name. But if he was, it wouldn't be one of the bad guys that was already introduced because all three of the guys were together when they were talking about him. Maybe Frank is really Aubrey's dad! That would be crazy if her dad was really a villain in disguise! But I'm pretty sure Aubrey would know if her dad was using a fake name. And why would Dave and the others hate Brad so much if he was really a villain like them? I'm thinking too far into this, aren't I? Ok, forget what I just said. Maybe Frank is just another character we haven't met yet.
Is Aubrey going to run into Dave again when she goes back into the mall? I'm not sure why I'm asking you. I'm sure I'll find out when I read the next chapter!
| Alice in Reality 6/5/12 . chapter 8
Is it weird that I kind of like Dana? I hate Miranda, but I like Dana for some weird reason. The same thing goes for the guys. I like Ronny but I don't like Xavier.
She nodded. "Just let me know if you need anything. Anything," she emphasized. Her huge creepy smile stayed on her face as she backed away from me.
Okay…that was the freakiest thing I ever saw.
"I know, wasn't it?"
I jumped and spun around. Dana was standing behind me with a smile of her own on her face. Did I say my last comment out loud…?
I loved this part! It reminded me of The Emperor's New Groove when the emperor got lost in the forest. I just watched that movie with the kids I was babysitting a few nights ago, which is why I remember it. Is that where you got the idea from? I know you love that movie, so I wouldn't be surprised if you got some inspiration from it.
I hope Brett has more luck than Aubrey when he follows the guys!
| Alice in Reality 6/5/12 . chapter 7
Oh Brett. I love you, but you need to work on your acting skills!
Things are starting to get dangerous, but that's a good thing for your readers. Good for your readers, but bad for your characters! It does make the plot more interesting, though. Every plot you create is interesting. :)
Can I make a guess about something? Ronny doesn't seem to like Dave very much. I think he's going to end up helping Aubrey and Brett somehow. Even so, I can't help but wonder why he's hanging around Dave to begin with when he doesn't like him. I'm sure you'll do a great job of explaining things and making everything fit together by the end, though.
I hope their plan to stalk Dave's friends doesn't result in the complete destruction of the mall. Knowing you, something crazy and hilarious is bound to happen!
| Alice in Reality 6/5/12 . chapter 6
The key recorder thing was brilliant! I never would've thought of something like that! I was right in thinking that Aubrey's way of getting Brett to believe her would be epic. :) And, not counting the time in the forest when Dave killed that guy, this was the first time Dave was hostile in front of Aubrey. That was a cool (but intimidating) turn of events.
I can't wait to see what happens next!
| Alice in Reality 6/5/12 . chapter 5
I'm so sorry AG91. I just saw the emails saying that you updated this story with chapters 8, 9, and 10...and that's when I realized that I never read chapters 5, 6, and 7! I feel like a terrible loyal reviewer now. :( (See, I even used an emoticon to show you how sad it made me!)
I'm going to review all the chapters I missed! First off, I like that this chapter is from Brett's point of view. It's a nice change. His conversation with his sister was funny! I like Natalie more than Olivia. (Olivia is Aubrey's sister, right? I hope I have the right character...)
I love the way Dave found out that Aubrey really was the one that saw him. Brett calling him is an innocent act, but it still makes your readers freak out because they know that it's a bad idea.
I love how calm and collected Dave is as a villain. He just killed someone, but you would never be able to guess by talking to him. You have a talent for making amazing, believable characters!
I also liked that Brett went back to the forest with Aubrey to look for clues, but you didn't make him overly gullible. He still didn't believe her even though they're best friends. Something tells me that, when he finally does believe her, she's going to convince him in some kind of epic way. :)
Do you still want me to use two emoticons per review? I used two for this one!
| Evil Dr. Yoho 5/29/12 . chapter 10
I was right! Now Helena knows! I can't imagine being in her shoes. I hate public restrooms as it is, so I can't imagine standing on the toilet so a bad guy wouldn't know I was in the stall. That was a smart thing to do, though. Helena is obviously going to be the brains of the group. Helena will be the one to think of the next step, I'm guessing Art will be the one with common sense by what you told us about him, Aubrey will be the one to act before she thinks, and Brett will be the joker who gets them into trouble rather than getting them out of it. It's the perfect combination of people to make a great comedy story! :)
Knowing you and your writing style, I know the group will run into Frank at the end of the story. I don't want to wait until the end to meet him! You have me curious. I know you didn't give us a lot of info about him yet, but in my own mind, I imagine he's a big scary muscular guy. I also imagine that he was arrested before (maybe by Aubrey's dad) and he broke out of jail. That might be the reason Dave and his gang hate Aubrey's dad. I still think Dave wants to kill him even if he says he doesn't. Don't tell me if I'm right about any of this, though. I want to build onto my theory and change it if necessary as the story progresses. I can't wait to meet Art in chapter 11! Update soon! :D
| Evil Dr. Yoho 5/29/12 . chapter 9
I love how you made Brett embarrass himself by falling on top of a table. XD You show no mercy to your poor characters!
"I called you three times! Three times! You didn't respond! What the hell were you doing?" she asked angrily. That's when she saw the bikini top in Adam's hand. "…Did you steal a bikini?" she asked blankly.
You have NO idea how much I laughed at this. I was seriously crying! XD Brett's getting ganged up on by everyone!
And who could forget about Adam and Joey? :D It was great seeing (or, uh, reading about them) again, even if they were indirectly helping the bad guys.
The end of this chapter makes me think that Helena and Art are going to join the group soon. I'll have to read to find out! :)
| Evil Dr. Yoho 5/29/12 . chapter 8
Poor Aubrey! She can't even stalk people without Becky getting in the way! XD
I love how you described Aubrey's voice change when she talked to Dana and Miranda. I could hear her guy-with-a-head-cold voice in my head while I was reading. That's one of the things I love about your stories. You're so good at describing things. I have no issue imagining your characters and settings. Great job as always! :)
| TheFateKeeper 5/26/12 . chapter 10
Wait, wait, wait! What do you mean those of us who read Heartbreaker will know who's being introduced next? OHMIGOD, is Frank actually Steve? Wait, no, that's not right. Is it...? I'm SO CONFUSED! Helena seems sort of bitchy, but also definitely clever, which could be useful to them. Great chapter as usual!
| thenutrunningthenuthouse 5/25/12 . chapter 10
Hey! Once I review this, I'll be responding to your PM. Sorry this took so long to review.
["What is it with you trapping me in fucking bathrooms?" I snapped at him.] - trust me, Aubrey, I'm thinking the same thing right now...
["Do you know how to say "I'm going to kill you if you don't shut the fuck up" in Spanish?" he asked calmly.] - uhhh, Voy a matarte si tú no cierra la boca chinga...
ON a more serious note, I love how your villain is allowed to be funny. The story I'm going to write is very serious aside from one of the most evil characters in book being a jokester. I feel like it adds so many dimensions to allow the bad guys to make people laugh. I love how you incorporated this. I think Dave may be one of your best villains (aside from Tim...I didn't like Steve)
Lol Dave though, with him all like, Why would I tell you and then he goes and tells her. Although, just a small suggestion, I think it would work fine if he only asked the question once.
Wait...I think I say "take a chill pill" and I'm under 20. o_o Well then...
Dave Argenhaly. What is up with your cool-assed last names? And I love how Aubrey and Dave joke around with the stereotypical villain lines, although idk what's up with the rolfcopter. For someone who's behind on the times, he seems to known Internet speak well.
Hahah awkward moments with Helena FTW. If I'd be in taht situation, I would be scared to death. And awkward-ed to death. I mean, can you imagine being the idiot stuck in the bathroom after that one?
I am looking forward to the constant Becky insults with Helena awkwardly in the room. :D
WAIT. IS THE NEXT GUY ART PAINTER? :D Oh man, I love this story. Seriously, among all my published and FP books, this is one of my favorites! Keep being an amazing author and update soon!
| TheFateKeeper 5/25/12 . chapter 9
Aw, poor Brett. I like him, but he can be a clutz, and his abrasive manner doesn't gain him any new friends. Is Joey high in this? I thought he quit! But it's nice to see him, and Adam, again. I've always liked when authors use characters from their earlier novels in their new ones because it's proof that their lives go on after the last page. Adam's comment about his girlfriend acting like Aubrey when he does something wrong made me laugh so hard for so long. You never cease to amaze me. On to chapter 10!