|Reviews for muse|
| writemystorywithoutink 7/3/11 . chapter 1
The idea of your writing being "writers block melting" is really clever; I wish I had thought of that. And the way you described your writing of poetry as, "tiny fragments of sentences [trickling] out in ways that sometimes collide into you and over me" explains to me a little how you are able to create such an effect of genuineness and write such pure and honest-feeling poems. I did think that the very last line of the poem (though let's face it, lots of things are over me) didn't jive with the rest for some reason. Maybe I just don't have a full grasp of its meaning yet.
| thewhimsicalbard 6/27/11 . chapter 1
I still owe you a few, don't I?
I think this is... number three. Regardless, I have them starred on my email, so we'll get there eventually.
I love the opening line. The contradiction hooks people right away.
You could try paragraphing(/stanza-ing) this a little bit more, but that may break up the "tightened" visual effect. Your call.
I feel like this poem has two parts: the first is the writer's block bit, and the second is the part after the colon. Despite the fact that the colon implies connection, they seem a bit too far removed from each other. Are there any ways you could change the language, the punctuation, or the syntax to connect these two things?
Pretty solid poem you have here! On to number four!
| Punslinger 6/14/11 . chapter 1
I fear that some things here are over me, too. But I certainly know the feeling of trying to chip away a writer's block like an ice sculpture that won't take the shape I envision. Maybe I can borrow your muse the next time that happens.
| cab fed hig 6/14/11 . chapter 1