This story was AMAZING! the only thing I don't understand is how Alex is alive! Anyway I absolutely LOVED it!

Your story is still great:)

There are just some spelling and spacing mistakes(at the end the dialogue part) in chapter 11, maybe you would want to check through again?

For chapter 12, you wrote that "Are you serious?" Carter shouted, but I think u meant Connor shouted.

I like it that you have all the Oreas, Kitkats etc in your story, that's very creative.

Look forward to the rest of your story.

p.s: why am I the only one reviewing? I seriously think yr story deserves some professional praise from professional reviewers. Sry i'm not one. Hope more ppl will read yr work n review it...

I thought the part where you wrote about Connor's feelings was really good.

It leaves a sad feeling knowing that Connor's fate is somehow sealed though he actually has a nice heart and would like to live like a normal person...

Hi your story is really great!

It isn't complete yet right? I want to know the rest of the story so please continue...

And u made me like all of the guys.

Connor cos he seems the most caring towards lily, jade cos he seems to appear bad but actually he cares?(i think), owen cos he seems cool

And I like Cole the most! T.T Why is he dead? Can u revive him or something?

Is lily going to get together with any of the guys?