Really conveys emotion. "A high-rise... factory where dreams came true." Love this line, great work!

Happy New Year btw :D

I liked your poem, it really illustrated how you felt about this person. It paints the emotions that most individuals feel when they fall in love or take an interest in someone.

And i love the last two lines 'One word from you and I lost it all' its cute.

well done, keep writing.

x.

Fantastic. The last two lines are great.