| Reviews for Julia, Romae Puellae |
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cloclocupcake7 7/8/11 . chapter 1I love this plot but I have to say, the fact that you started with "Hi, my name is Julia," bothers me. This introduction does nothing to push the story forward. If you need to slip in information about her past, you could tactfully place it-say, when you mention they are going to Caesar's funeral. As to that, which Caesar are you speaking of? Augustus and other emperors called themselves Caesar, so it would help if you added details about which Caesar you are speaking of-if it was Julius Caesar, that he was brutally murdered; if it was Augustus, maybe something about Livia or the Pax Romana; etc. This is a great story, though, and I have high hopes for it. |
Cynthia Brent 6/20/11 . chapter 1Great start! Are we going to meet Octavian and Marc Antony? |
Lynn K. Hollander 6/19/11 . chapter 1How does Julia know that she's in 57 B.C.? Is she psychic? She cannot possibly know about the current calendar, the calender we use. You apparently need to do further research. Romans counted time from the founding of the city, in Latin: Ab Urbe Condita. 57 B. C. works out to 747 AUC, depending on which month the year count starts. Romans also refered to years as 'being in the consulate of X and Y'. Try assuming the persona of translator: Put in a TN (translator's note) and inform the reader that Julia is writing in 57 B. C. |
Nikou 6/18/11 . chapter 1Interesting story... Is she going to have an offer of matrimony? That's my guess, with what I know of the time period. These kind of stories are very interesting to me! I don't know latin, so we'll see if I can work my way through despite your use of it. Interesting point of view, I've not read many stories from this time period that focused on a young girl's perspective. Should be very interesting! Nice to find a fellow grammatical guru, who also focuses on proper spelling. Well done on keeping the content readable! |