|Reviews for Acedia's Anguish|
| The Imagination Addict 6/23/11 . chapter 1
hmm it's interesting. it made my hair stand, which is good. but i think the story could have been more emotionally wrought.
it's good in the sense that there's a nice amount of subtlety. the way you write in the background info is not too explicit. :) but the whole story's a bit stagnant, very still. more like a snapshot. is that what you're aiming for?
i think the ending might be better if you erase the last paragraph when he names the kid n u write in third person. it's enough to stop at the part where she walks into the water.