HONESTLY THIS WUZ HARD 2 FOLLOW, ALSO NO 1 WUD WEAR A COOKIE MONSTER SHIRT, ALSO SOUNDS LIKE ONE OF MY STORYS CALL "THE BIG DANCE" HMMMM WOW JUST SAYIN!

That was particularly brutal and sad...Poor Samantha.

By the way, uh...I suggest a proofread. Just, proofread.

The mistakes are plenty (The leader said, "In a stern voice that is enough Erica. I think it should be, The leader said in a stern voice, "That is enough, Erica." like that).

This was much too rushed-looking.

"We're just going to eat you alive." Wow. Those are some psychotic ladies. That was so hilariously ridiculous.

...I don't want it to end here...

wow that was really intense. it was scary too! i liked the humor you threw in. id like to read more. check out my writing too if youre interested.