Again the whole ending it with one period makes it seem like the whole piece is one long sentence. I would get rid of it or punctuate the whole piece with sentences.

"siberia should be acknowledged as my fate"... Siberia

"rather I must fulfil this obligation"... fulfill

I loved the first two lines. The whole puzzle thing is done a lot, but you had a new unique spin on it. I also liked the word choice exasperate. It puts great emotion into it.

The whole tree thing I'm assuming is an allusion to the narrator not being able to have children? I liked that idea of explaining a bit more about the narrator and their situation. That said, it didn't really seem to fit there for me. The two situations just didn't really connect.

I liked the rest of it. "life has accepted me from

my first heartbeat "... is a beautiful way to look at the world. And I also liked "renting this house owned by love," It was a good description and I liked the play on rent vs own.

The piece itself has a great message especially in the end which I also really like.

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Amazing. This poem inspires to keep on going ahead and having hope despite how futile it may be or the challenges that come across it. Keep it up )

I love it; especially the purse string bit. I just love how bitingly poetic your work is.

Glad to see you're still writing. I'm in a pickle with writers block. Excellent work as always. Keep it Up!

You always have creative thought provoking lines: "Now that I'm renting this house owned by love"-how awesome is that! Good work.

Hey Anna!

I like this one. Reminds me of the beach for some reason. House owned by love is a beautiful image. Very nice :)

I hope everything is going well for ya!

Love, your twin,

Kati!

You make beautiful use of metaphor and allegory here: "slash the purse strings" for breaking the psychological umbilical cord binding us to foolish illusions. And: "renting this house owned by love" the body we didn't ask for but feel metaphysically compelled to cherish and use to its fullest potential. But: "Siberia should be acknowledged as my fate" is a little too bleak when you: "hold the baton to enthuse others."

Overall, a striking poetic affirmation of life for all of its pain and disappointment.

Hey wow I really like this piece in particular of your works, definitely one of your best ones. Wow!

I really enjoyed this piece as it is lyrical and intriguing. You have some really nice lines such as: "Cracks of the jigsaw puzzle exasperate the landscape" and "Because I finally understand that life has accepted me from my first heartbeat" At times I found your meanings a little confusing, particularly the siberia reference, however, I don't think that made reading this any less enjoyable. I found this a lot of fun to read and the imagery you created made it even more so. This is a well written piece. I like it a lot. :D