|Reviews for Neko's Tale|
| Anxious Axolotl 9/12/12 . chapter 1
I'm intrigued! You introduced elements of the plot quickly, but have so far left most of them unexplained. That being said, I did feel that the first two paragraphs were a little unnecessary, I think starting with the conversation in the chamber would be a lot more exciting and attention-grabbing than a description of where they were and them walking around. It also got a bit confusing during the conversation in the chamber, referring to the characters as the creature, second creature and third creature as well as the dragon and the other dragon. I would suggest introducing the names of the characters when you are describing them, after all, it's very hard to keep track of descriptions if you don't know what characters they're about!
Very nice though, glad to see there's lots more to read!
| Mike T. Smith 7/12/11 . chapter 1
this is really good keep up the good work