Wow very lucid dreaming and this is an excellent poem to depict that, and I mean this as a compliment, I could see a band like Evanescence, Night wish, or Within temptation with a song like this. This is amazing!

Pretty good. I like the theme and can somewhat relate to the lyrics. The Latin (that was Latin, right?) part kind of confused me as it came out of nowhere, but I also think it was a creative addition that made the poem more unique.