oh my god this is. literally perfect as in i would not change anything about it at all wow fuck

"leaving me to rot in my / gilded happiness" is. a fucking a

OHHMAAGAAAAWWWDDDD!

BEST MULTI CHAPTER YOU"VE EVER WRITTEN! Holycrap! This was amazing! And this chapter was sooo cute!

people complain about how i "always want it all". that isn't true, not in the slightest. i only want what's good; i don't want everything, because everything can't give me what i want.

everything can't give me you.

I LOVE THAT! SERIOUSLY!

YOU HAVE TALENT!

I CANT STOP TYPING IN CAPS!

AHHH!

:P

i write these poems

to free myself from this world

that says i'm worthless

[ —i'll prove them wrong ] That's my favorite line, and that's exactly why I write poems too.12

I can really relate to alot of your works.

Nice job! I can't wait to read more!

(1 more to go I think!) :p

w ow

preach it, guuuurl

i can relate so, so much. :'D

but yeah, very sexysexy. keep it up.

"everything can't give me you."

gah, so...speechless. this chapter, this whole pillowbook really is just so good! keep it up darling, you're going places :)

there is a certain "thing" this piece has that has me madly in love with it. i don't know what, but it's there. a, would read again.

short and attractive. me likey.

very, very nice.

oh you & your productivity. :C

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i liked this a lot. :D

just one thing tho, & i thing yodes pointed it out. "worst" would be the correct word, rather than "worse" & yeah.

C:

heh. the ever-present writer's frustration. writer's block. writer's i-want-to-stick-a-metal-rod-into-this-computer-scr een.

nitpick: the earliest form of "writing" was around 3500 bce? which is far off from 13000. :D also, "being the worst" and not worse.

/shot ded for willfully ignoring artistic license

but anyway. chill. nice. good. great. very true, very easy to sympathize. i think everyone can.

beautiful, bro. so much feeling, so few words.

i love the format, too. very creative.

& so melancholy, but in a way that one can understand, like,

in a way one can relate to.

all in all, great work.

keep it up.

(also i ttly realize i haven't read or reviewed chapter five, nor did i receive an alert for it. :/ gdi fp, y u break my balls?)

this is depressing

and sad

and you know how i feel about depressing and sad things

anyway nice pretty keep up the work

this is cool

i like how you word things it's very eloquent and refined

autumn's not that bad, i'm sure & hope you feel better

wonderful as always,

hope you feel better.