:) I must say, you started this off with a bang. Excellent discriptions that worked really well, because they made the story come off more realistic and likeable. I did notice a few little gramatical errors that disrupted the flow a bit (choppy sentances and such) but not much other then that. Great word choice and so far, pretty good.

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That was certanly an eventful chapter. Can't wait to find out what happens next.

That was... intresting. I'm curious to know why the narrator is running, the description is better and flows more than most first person stories I've read.

I don't really like first person stories. But, good anyways ;)