|Reviews for Stephen's grandma|
| simpleplan13 8/6/11 . chapter 1
I didn't get the dash in the title in the piece. Especially since it wasn't in the main title.
I liked the piece. I thought the assonance (I think that's the right word...) with race, chaste, waste and late was great. It created a flow and an interesting sound to a haiku.
The only thing is the second line with the fire wastes seemed a bit like it should've been on the third line, but couldn't for the syllable count. Kinda awkward.
Still overall great piece. I like how you personalized by making it about someone's grandma.
Review Marathon this weekend (link in my profile)