To be honest, I don't what to say. You asked me to review your stories, but I am not very good at writing reviews. I could say how much I liked it, (which I do) but that would be lame. So instead I wrote this.

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I still liked the line in the other version you showed me too

"When I hugged for the first time, I kissed you"

I love this. Although, my brain takes it in the other direction of, cat, tapped and band. Lol. But, this is amazing and I refuse to allow you to tell me my writing is good ever again!

This is beautiful.

Such a mature tone to this. The images don't seem to congeal at first but by the end I'm left with the image of a broken girl sitting in the car beside the school parking lot. The word "motherless" gets to me every time.

Keep writing!