|Reviews for No More Monsters|
| laurenmlbc 7/27/11 . chapter 1
This was beautifully and tactfully written...just so sad that anyone has to deal with something like that. Completely wrong and unfair and special place in hell for people who do things like that. The part with the tent was just heartbreaking. Wonderful job!
| Ephemerality 7/26/11 . chapter 1
I love this! While the story itself is about a topic that's very heavy and dark in nature, you found a way to make it more light and innocent without losing any of the seriousness. In the end, it made for a simple, sweet story with just the right touch of sadness.
The only critique I had was for one particular line: She hugged him, "I would love to go there someday. See? I didn't laugh."
It may just be my opinion, but the dialogue seemed a little awkward and jerky with "See? I didn't laugh." placed at the end. My suggestion would be to move it to the beginning, or before "I would love to go there someday."
Other than that, though, I absolutely adored this story. Kudos to you for a well written one-shot! (: