|Reviews for Giving Chase|
| o 7/27/12 . chapter 16
Thanks for the reply. I might get an account soon so I can keep track of updates.
I'm glad Tom is just her friend. I wasnt sure if there was history there or if he were gay ro what. But they're good friends anyway.
I just read through the story again and I hope there's more of the party!
| Sarah f 7/27/12 . chapter 16
oh dear, this is a good one.. excited for more!
| thenifoundfivedollars 7/27/12 . chapter 16
This is one of those chapters that leaves me hanging on the edge of my seat because it’s building and building towards… something. Although at this point I can’t tell if it will be something good (like a version of Frankie’s fantasy playing out? Rhy’s being shocked at her feminine charms) or bad (like he doesn’t notice or… oh, I can’t even imagine all the things that could go poorly), but either way I’m anxiously awaiting the next installment.
I like the interaction with her mom. Vanessa is funny, and it’s always a good reminder to remember to condition one’s hair. Although, it’s hard to blame Frankie when she does always have hers hidden beneath a helmet…
What do the ‘other lasses’ like June do? Are they also riders, female jockeys like Frankie, or something entirely different? I know it’s not all that important to the story, but that scene made me pause and remember that there are a lot of other people around. Just call it curiosity.
The last scene made me smile. I like Frankie’s relationship with Pippa, Emmie and Billy. Lots of funny bits and good chemistry there. I also remember quite clearly the part where Frankie caught a good glimpse of Donnie in the steam room and thinks ‘ah, that’s why he has such a good-looking girlfriend’, or something of the sort. It’s always nice when writers remember what they’ve written. Even if it’s not crucial to the story, it’s funny and lends a lot of credibility your way. Plus, it make me think you know your characters well.
Brilliant chapter. I am so, so, so looking forward to what comes next!
| flunkybubbleshorts 7/25/12 . chapter 16
Hahaha! What a fun chapter! Look at Frankie being all bold. I've been grinning all the way through
| hannah221 7/24/12 . chapter 15
Thanks o (Guest) for your review. Apologies for not replying to you personally. Unfortunately, I don't know who you are!
To answer your question, Tom is just Frankie's friend. In the rewrite it is made clearer the relationship between them. I know it might sound a shlep but I would recommend rereading from the start since I started posting chapters again as you'll have missed some other additions which have been added specifically to improve plot and flow and there will be things mentioned later on that you might not cotton onto because you won't have read the "Easter egg" left in a previous chapter.
And while I'm posting this, I'll just give a quick shout out to everyone about the SKoW Awards which are currently being run. Nominations are open until August 4th and Giving Chase will love you if you put it forward for one of the fantastic categories on offer. There are also some great 'Prompt' challenges for everyone to participate in. Go take a look at ;)
| o 7/24/12 . chapter 15
Is Tom just her friend? I know hes been in the story i just can't remember if it was clarified what his relationship is with Frankie.
Thank you for the fast update.
| thenifoundfivedollars 7/24/12 . chapter 15
I lovelovelove the Rhys/Frankie interaction at the beginning. They’re shift in relationship – being enemies to maybe, perhaps peers – is such a fun transition to watch. I’m really hoping it becomes something more soon, but this is really my favorite part of a good romance.
Her conversation with Tom was also amusing. I love those two. :D I think the addition of Adele is new, though not the talent competition. If memory serves, that was in the original version. However, the attention to details in the rewrite are nice. I wish I could remember how many chapters you had up before – or at least how far in the story you’d written, but for some frustrating reason I cannot…
Brilliant chapter and, as always, I’m eagerly awaiting the next one!
| o 7/23/12 . chapter 14
So cute! I definitely want more!
| thenifoundfivedollars 7/20/12 . chapter 14
You are seriously spoiling us with updates. Don’t worry, I’m not complaining!
This was one of my favorite chapters before the rewrite. I think that was because it was a vast improvement in their relationship. It gives me such a warm, fluffy feeling inside reading Rhys sharing about his hobbies and Frankie admitting that hers include Girl Guides. It’s such a Frankie thing to do and I love that aspect of her personality.
Between Rhys’ apology, winning Frankie’s awe after the story of his leg, and clearing the unknown from Seth’s story, this chapter was once again a pleasure to read.
(and I THINK I'm signed in this time :)
| Anehalia 7/19/12 . chapter 14
I like the extra parts added into the story. it made it even better, which is impressive.
| flunkybubbleshorts 7/19/12 . chapter 14
Ahh. I was wondering when this chapter would turn up :) I remember it from before.
I'm glad some of the previous tension got cleared up and the Seth story came out.
You're all the way upto chapter 25 already? That's great! Happy writing :)
| flunkybubbleshorts 7/18/12 . chapter 13
I hadn't had the time to catch up on the new version of the story. I'm glad I got down to it today!
I like how the story is coming along. The writing seems more effortless than before! :)
I'm waiting to read more!
| Garneau 7/17/12 . chapter 13
Just wanted to say I am really enjoying the new write up of Giving Chase.
I think you have set up the characters and plot a lot better (eg. Frankie's father and her strive to impress him).
Also I have finally gotten around to getting a Kindle so I will be definitely buying Keeping the Peace and At Long Odds and reviewing them for you!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Ps. Because I already reviewed the previous version I Amy sign in and write a review which is why there haven't been any for a long while. But don't worry I'm still reading!
| thenifoundfivedollars 7/17/12 . chapter 13
Gah, I keep forgetting to sign in... I swear fictionpress said I was 'Posting as: thenifoundfivedollars', but whatever. That last insanely long review was from me. :)
| Guest 7/17/12 . chapter 13
So, I read this one on my phone the moment I got the email notification. And I have to say, I can’t remember the last time I was grinning like an idiot on the train. It was certainly worth it though. Probably my favorite chapter yet!
As Rhys mumbled about how Frankie couldn’t ride or drive, I got far too angry on her behalf. For someone so strong and driven, she has a difficult time standing up for herself. Usually it’s to Jack, and by biting her tongue she’s actually going about it the intelligent way and saving her job, but I was so mad for her and I feared she would sit back and take it. But she didn’t! You wrote their little spat wonderfully, and I could FEEL the last twelve chapters of subtle tension explode in those few clipped sentences. It really was brilliant! I think (maybe?) that, along with the car scene, Frankie’s reaction to Rhys’ put-downs was a new addition? Either way, I really enjoyed it.
I’m also delighted by their pent-up frustrations towards their fathers. Both being in racing families, I’d bet they’d have a lot to talk about if they would both stop being so stubborn. Oh, but that’s what makes these types of stories so much fun. :D
I’m skipping around here, but I made a few notes the second read-through. It’s a testament to your writing how flawlessly you slip little blips of Frankie’s thoughts into the narrative that predict the inevitable. This line:
Frankie silently cursed the owners of Blue Jean Baby for choosing black and royal blue stripes as their colours. It was making Rhys look sexier than he really was.
was amazing. Gah. I’m resorting to sounds to get my point across… but there’s something about seeing Rhys through Frankie’s eyes that I love so much. Many writers attempt this, but I feel like here it’s really, really successful!
Another highlight was the small truce they drew up. When Frankie warned Rhys to watch out for his horse’s jumping (to which he replied sarcastically) I was on the edge of my seat hoping something bad didn’t happen. However, not only was I pleasantly surprised, I was THRILLED by the leaps in their friendship. When Rhys turned the tables and offered Frankie some advice, it was another grinning-like-an-idiot moment from me. I warned you, I had a LOT of those during this chapter.
However, it was the last bit of Rhys pulling his goggles down, smirking, and giving Frankie that playful, dare I say flirtatious?, ‘L’ that sealed this as the best-chapter-ever. Oh, and the comment about his dog. I actually laughed aloud reading that particular line! It really was brilliant, and for some reason incredibly hot. I know, weird, but I’m loving the direction this is going and all the progress made in lucky Chapter 13!
This one will probably need another read over before the next, just know that this version really is more polished than the last. Which is saying something, because I was in love with the previous. That being said, this is quickly turning into my favorite story on this site. I’m appreciating the quick updates – and best of luck with SKOW!