A poem, in technical terms, is a beautifully written idea, this one, and correct me if I'm wrong, is about fate, and how we can't control it. One of my ideas about fate is that it is inevitable, but fate is the tools we use to sculpt our destiny.

Just one thing that stood out was the lack of punctuation. (My petpeeve, sorry) And that's because without it, it mushes together.

However, this rings with so much truth and strength, it's amazing. The imagery and wordplay is extremely well done, making it possible to see this in actuallity before you. :D

(This is Tik from the Review Marathon. Check out the link on my profile.)