I loved this because it was so visual that I actually felt shudders and because the way you set this up is amazing. Ending; completely unexpected as I thought you meant metaphorically. The stanzas have been broken up in the right places, easing along the flow and turning this into a powerful and outspoken piece. It is amazing how you managed to describe what he is going through.

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O that is an interesting twist! Very well done.