Oh gods, I remember you, dude! 'course, if you don't remember me, I'll be one sad bastard.

Anyway, on to your story. It's a decent start, I'd say. Interesting characters and writing, but in some ways it doesn't feel quite connected. More or less it's the sudden addition of Oki's profile. It's interesting, but adding a profile in the middle of the story kills momentum. While it gave me interesting info about her the story slowed down when you placed it there.

Anyway, I'll be reading the rest later after I get some rest. It's been a long time, but hey, if you're interested, stop by my page and read and review.

See ya!

awesome finish to an interesting fight. got a question, what happened to travis since he seemed to be alive at the end of the first one. Aaron is a cool character but just wondering.

this is a great start, can't wait for the next one.

very captivating chapter, very hooked and well written. Cannot wait for the next chapter! :)