So sweet and sad... I love your descriptions and the message of moving on was really nice. :) Love it.

That's really sweet!

In a darkish, sad way.

I like the idea of the story, how you combine all the ideas together from present and past. Your writing flows really well as well. It's lovely to read.

Only problem is, sure you wrote a story and it has meaning, but theres nothing there to make the reader want to keep reading till the end. They might read the first paragrpah, and then just lose interest. You should try and capture them more from the start instead of lulling them along, otherwise they might lose interest.

Don't take that to heart. It's lovely writing. Keep it up! :)