I loved the abrupt ending.

Maybe not abrupt exactly. . .

more unfinished.

I like that.

It goes with the piece.

It's rather a random little poem.

More like the thoughts flitting through your mind.

And the ending for that is perfect.

Because our thoughts really have no 'set' beginning and end.

I like this, especially the clean cut way you've used imagery, but the ending seems kinda unfinished to me, personally.