Nice work. Could use some editing and development, but I definitely enjoyed the read. Thanks for posting!

Both sound really good Charlie but I will throw my vote for #2. Let me explain why: I live near a military base and I have alot of friends there and through out the states and I have lost quite a few friends and a very special friend in the wars these past few years. I will be honest and say I am proud of everyone risking their life for our country but I cannot and will not read anything regarding war, the pain cuts to deep and I don't want to feel anything regarding it. Nothing against you or others who write about it and I know this is just a story but I can't atleast right now. I love your story RESISTENCE and I LOVE your writing ABILITY. I have no doubt that anything you write would be BRILLIANT! I am sorry if this has upset you but wanted to explain why I picked the other.

I think you should do the second one, Dark Paradise.

just out of curiousity what is a pregnant pause? was it suppose to be a prolonged pause or something else?

Ah, wonderful, wonderful ending. Wow. I just want to thank you for writing this story...I enjoyed every single bit of it. I hope to see more stories from you in the future!

Another BEAUTIFUL chapter here! I don't like Rose but there always has to be atleast one you don't like right? You are doing a WONDERFUL job at writing your characters and I love the emotions and personalities you have given them! They come alive in my mind and now on to another chapter!

BEAUTIFUL and I am so happy she had a great time-hope this keeps up-on to the next chapter!

I am enjoying this story-I love the concept you worked into about noone is better than another because of their job, where they live or how much money there is -atleast right now! I LOVE your characters especially Lorena and Lizzie-my heart breaks for them. I am looking for more and am on my way to the next chapter-excellent writing!

The story goes a bit too fast. First she was at school, then she was at the hospital. What was the point of starting the story with her being at the school when the real beginning is at the hospital? That sort of beginning would work, if you made it more interesting, or more eye catching, emphasizing, maybe, what she felt, saw, heard, at the school, how everything was normal for a first day, and how everything was completely disrupted when she got the phone call of her family's accident. The way you wrote it however was really shallow, no depth. It didn't feel like anything had started until she'd gotten to the hospital, which makes the school introduction superfluous to the story.

So sad that it's over. I always looked forward to reading this. Thank you for sharing your wonderful story with the rest of us. Loved every minute of it. :)

The next chapter is the epilogue? No, that can't be. You can't end this story. I demand that you keep working on this story. (sighs) all good things must come to an end. It's going to be sad to say goodbye to this story. I always enjoy reading an update. Anyway, loved loved this chapter, especially the last scene between Lorena and Robert. Can't wait to read the end.

PERFECT ENDING. I am so sad this is over, but I can't wait to see how the epilogue wraps things up :)

Lovely chapter. Please update soon! :)

Damn I didn't think he would leave everything for her. The scene between her and Robert was sad. Beautifully written though. Can't wait to read more. Love this story. :)

Is the setting supposed to be in 2009 or 2008? I'm really confused :/ But other than that, I love this story :)